1:05:00
This is good.
Powerful.
1:05:04
Yours, too.
1:05:09
You tell the truth with such...
1:05:12
delicacy.
1:05:23
- I hope you don't mind.
- Mind?
1:05:25
Why should I mind?
I welcome constructive criticism.
1:05:29
Good.
1:05:31
If it's constructive.
1:05:41
- What are you doing?
- Just a few things.
1:05:44
Here it's all shrieks...
1:05:48
and abstracts.
1:05:50
It's too melodramatic.
1:05:52
You gotta take time to expand.
1:05:55
You're enjoying this.
1:05:57
- What?
- Cutting me up.
1:05:59
I don't want to write
the way you write.
1:06:04
I don't want you to write
the way I write.
1:06:06
You've got to write in your own voice.
I'm just making a few suggestions.
1:06:09
It's tight in places.
Here.
1:06:12
Read it out loud
and see how it sounds.
1:06:15
- I won't give you that pleasure.
- Pleasure?
1:06:18
Hold on a minute here.
1:06:21
Can't you take it?
You gotta take a few taps on the chin.
1:06:24
A few taps on the chin?
1:06:27
Amuse yourself with someone else.
1:06:30
A prizefighter, for instance.
1:06:32
You're right exactly.
A prizefighter.
1:06:35
You've got to get knocked down
occasionally to acquire ring tactics.
1:06:39
The strategy,
the art of fighting.
1:06:42
You can't just shadowbox in your room.
1:06:45
You wouldn't last two minutes
when you step into the ring.
1:06:47
I am not interested
in stepping into a ring with you.
1:06:51
The world will give us
plenty of beatings.
1:06:54
We need each other's support.
1:06:57
Should I criticize you
like an outsider?